Turbine powerplant by crankshaft

Hey guys. It's crankshaft from Imaginefx. I've made some progress on my turbine powerplant (it's slow because I can only draw roughly 30 min a day. I'm also doing two versions simultaneously ). I've posted this wip on other forums/sites but got no feedback which is very frustrating. It may be a little late to fix any problems but I want to at least know what they are so I can improve for next time. Another note: This is a photo of the piece taken by an old camera...The original looks much sharper/better.

A few questions: Where do your eyes first land? (I've asked this before but now there is tone added) I've made the focal the turbine. I'll be making a digital version of this as well and I'll make sure to add more space around the turbine.

What do you think of the lighting? It's supposed to be a late afternoon/almost night time scene.

Please tell me what you think. Any and every critique is greatly appreciated. Looking forward to the community here.

Hey Crankshaft.

Firstly, I think your values are pretty reasonable though you could probably do with some hard shadows to make the lighting a little clearer.

I think you've got some slight perspective problems across the image as a whole. The most obvious part being the lower half of the front of your power plant. That said it's not really something you can fix at this stage but I'd certainly look at trying to sort it when you get to the digital version. It is a complex shape with all those curves so it might be difficult but you should be able to manage it.



The main issue at the moment is, certainly as I see it anyway, that most of your lines and shapes are taking the viewer away from the focal point. I did a quick little draw over of where I think the eyes are being drawn at the moment. I felt that generally I was ending up going from the main structure straight to the bottom left (Orange X) area.

If you make sure it looks like the guy in the front is looking towards the turbine that will help a bit. Just make sure his head is clearly angled straight at it.

This again goes for the digital version. I'd probably also suggest extending your image by about a third or so on the left side and try and add something without too much detail or focus but connects the orange X up to the green line coming in from the left and the purple arrow coming in at the bottom. Basically something to take the eye from that lower left hand side and send it back to your focal point.

A slightly more interesting sky might also help you to do this with some good cloud shapes.

That's what I see at the moment anyway. I'd wait for some more feedback before doing anything to rash though
Good luck with it and I'll look forward to seeing you get onto a digital version since that's more my area of things.

I agree with what Claude had to say about your focal point on this one, and putting in some clouds with distinctive shapes could indeed help with what he mentions. Some very good advice there too.

I also took you image into PS real quick, and firstly just laid a posterize layer on top set @ 3 to show you how your darks, middle and lighter tones are showing at the present moment. (First image below) you can see there is not a lot of variation at the moment, but that's something you can fix quite quickly in PS, or whatever program you might be using. ... In the second image, I simply duplicated the layer, set it to multiply and did a quick adjustment for Brightness/Contrast. Brightness 50 and Contrast at 70, just to show how it looks darken up some.

Hope this is helpful in some way. Hope to see an update on it. Oh, and not sure if you were aware of this, but once you upload your image, clicking on the insert button will place the picture into the post, and not just add it as an attachment.






Was having some issues getting the second image to post up, and ended up having to resize since it was over the 512mb? limit on images. But you can compare this with your original, and see what else you might be able to do with it, even without taking it into digital if you wanted to darken in some areas.

I actually found that my eye was first drawn to the pale area at the bottom right. The high contrast attracted my eye.

You have heard the observation of the others on perspective and lighting, so I will not repeat the same, but I will say that having three distinct values in fore, mid and backgrounds is a good idea. If you can keep them distinct and clear then it will create depth. I think that sticking with the pale foreground is a good idea, but I would move that over to the left hand corner because, as has been observed, the flow of the drawing goes along the line of the turbine and ends in nothing. If it ended with the guy at the controls, it would add story telling interest.

It's a very detailed drawing and will look great in colour too. Looking forward to seeing more of this.

Thanks for sharing Crank!

Thank you so much for the insightful and detailed replies. I come from a background of drawing mainly line art and cars so this piece was a big learning experience. Eg This is my first time drawing mountains, trees and adding color. Here is the digital wip, quickly edited based on your feedback.



With the paper version, I agree with the shadows. The picture does seem low contrast/muted but I figured the lightning from the turbine would only be readily visible during darker hours. My thinking was that everything gets muted at dusk/night except for whatever intense light source there is, in this case the turbine. I was going to simply intensify the contrast of the turbine and lighten/darker in areas. Other than that I am at a lost for where to place additional shadows/lighting.

Perspective: I figured out the perspective manually to the best of my ability and it was a brutal experience to do. Fortunately I scanned the piece before going any further and used the vanishing point from photoshop to check for accuracy. To me the only problem I see would be the front but extra eyes would help.





Flow: I agreed with the paint over. I've added more canvas space and smoke stacks/electrical towers that feed the turbine via energy rays. I think now, even though this is a wip, that the focal is more clear cut. I don't know if I'll be able to change the original structure design through. I'm also going to crank the contrast of the turbine to make it more obvious. I wish I had this kind of feedback before otherwise I wouldn't of made these blatant mistakes!

Lastly, what do you think of the color?

The paper version will look similar but the composition will be a bit off since I can't add to the canvas. Do you guys think this fixes most of the problems? Anything else to add?

Wow! the perspective tools have really made an improvement!

The building is looking solid and realistic already. Really nice start!

Thanks for the compliment. Feedback like that really keeps me going. I won't be working on the digital version as much for now in order to get the traditional drawing done and out of the way.